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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2003-08-05 08:00 PM


The light shines down long and hard.
When will it come to a close?
When will the rays stop dancing upon me..
tempting me to be radiant.

I want a winter grey to match this numb state I've walked into.
I'm browsing through the days,
deciding when and where to smile.

I'll wait for the night.
For my conversations with the stars.
We'll smile with muted brightness,
and exchange a knowing glance.

I'll walk beneath the shadows
and whisper my fears into the sky.
My words will form a layer of density around this darkness.
But no one takes note.
For they've long gone to rest.

[This message has been edited by Lexy (08-05-2003 08:00 PM).]

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IndigoEve
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since 2003-01-10
Posts 279
Etched in the illusion of time
1 posted 2003-08-05 09:24 PM


Oh my, I do love the mysterious air that this poem contains...so haunting. It makes me feel and savor each word, the overall sense being wonderful. Great job! 'Tis quite a beautiful write.

For saints have hands that pilgrims' hands do touch,
And palm to palm is holy palmers' kiss.--"Romeo and Juliet"

Tequilia_Sunrise
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since 2003-02-19
Posts 612
Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2003-08-13 09:58 PM


WOW lexy i really enjoyed this. great feeling in this write.


"I'll walk beneath the shadows
and whisper my fears into the sky"

Intresting

Tequilia

SilentTears
Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371
Lost and Broken
3 posted 2003-08-15 10:35 PM


Wow! I really enjoyed this. As I do all of your work! This was a very beautiful poem. It flowed so perfectly. Nice write!

"I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..."

eor
Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
4 posted 2003-08-25 02:52 PM


ohlala, great write

"There never was a genius without a tincture of madness."

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