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Pollita
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0 posted 2003-08-05 02:08 PM



      When I am alone,
        I remenise in our memories.
          Each and every one,
            Rolls a tear down my cheek.

   Especially when you last put your arms around me,
     Inside I felt a thousand knives slowly
                 Cutting my skin.

         The way you looked into my eyes,
            Made me feel so comfortably lost,
              As
                 I
                   Gazed
                         Into
                              Yours.

        Remembering how wonderful it felt,
         Laying beside you, hearing your heart beat.
          Missing each time,
           You told me how beautiful I am,
            Recieving a kiss from you.

         In my dreams,
          Those moments play over and over again.
           Your hand, gently holding mine,
            Your kiss that I couldnt resist.

           Spending my nights,
            Wishing that you'd be there,
             Holding me in your arms.

        Missing you,
                     Wanting you,
                                  Crying over you.

* A wise monkey never monkies with another monkey's monkey *

© Copyright 2003 Delaniie Quirk - All Rights Reserved
gemjop
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1 posted 2003-08-05 03:38 PM


Oh delaney, this aches big time...oooh like being stabbed right in the heart.

i know this very well, and you did indeed describe it very well.

hugs to you.



love gem

peachesNcream
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2 posted 2003-08-06 01:26 AM


I know EXACTLY how ya feel. Honestly, I'm goin' through the same thing right now. It hurts badly but over time the pain slowly subsides. I hope better times for you! Great write, I enjoyed this! So I can read it again in the future, I'm gonna put it in my library! ~Jess

"At the touch of love, everything becomes a poem." -Plato

Deep_Inside
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3 posted 2003-08-06 02:44 AM


i like how you structure you poems. pain sucks feel better and keep writing

when you live you begin to die
when you die memories of you life lives in others
when memories of you begin to fade
you truly begin to die

Pollita
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4 posted 2003-08-06 03:29 PM


Aww, thanks you guys. Im glad that you liked it!!!  Im better now...For many reasons! hehehe.
luv ya peoples *muah*

* A wise monkey never monkies with another monkey's monkey *

Jaime
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5 posted 2003-08-06 03:38 PM


Beautiful. Honest. Bare.

I like how this is lacking the tricks of pride. You're stating very openly how you feel.

the faeries creep into my hair at night leaving it in terrible knots

jaime.

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Riding
6 posted 2003-08-07 12:46 PM


It's hard to grow up and watch your friends remain in the same mindset that you left them in

Star T
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7 posted 2003-08-07 09:31 PM


i know how u feel.the pain sometimes seems so unbearable but we all get thru it somehow thats the comforting part!

Pollita
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8 posted 2003-08-08 05:05 PM


Yeah, that is comforting, Im pretty sure I got thru it. plus, right now, Im too happy to b sad. so I guess Im occupying my saddness with happiness. feh, its all good!

* A wise monkey never monkies with another monkey's monkey *

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