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chicken
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0 posted 2003-07-28 07:38 AM


I loved you so much
I hated you.

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Star T
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1 posted 2003-07-28 08:46 AM


those two lines say exactly how love feels sometimes..a lot of times.u could add a few lines though to add even more beauty to the piece.

SilentTears
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Lost and Broken
2 posted 2003-07-28 11:50 AM


I agree with Star on this one...most definitely.

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

BrokenDreams
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In The Clouds
3 posted 2003-07-28 12:11 PM


While this does describe how love can be sometimes, I agree that it would probably be better if you added a few lines to elaborate on what you have already said.

-Jen

"One's philosophy is not best expressed in words; it's expressed in the choices on makes." -Eleanor Roosevelt

dertah
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4 posted 2003-07-28 02:28 PM


this person has seen the light!!!!  preach on preacher.
Lexy
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5 posted 2003-07-28 03:27 PM


LOL!! great. True.
~Lex

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in the pouring rain
6 posted 2003-07-28 06:00 PM


short, and sweet!


riley

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OtherSideOfTheMirror
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7 posted 2003-07-28 06:52 PM


well this was true but... kind of funny. not like ha-ha...just weird... so true and yet so simple it seems it should have smacked ya in the face.

so yeah, you're poem just smacked me in the face.

~cassi

anawnda
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8 posted 2003-07-28 11:42 PM


remind me of the song that goes....."i hate you but i love you, i cant stop thinking og you...im stuck on you" i can so relate!!!!=)


* you can hurt me...with your bare hands,or
you can hurt me using the sharp edge of what you said.....* jewel kilcher

kj
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since 2003-07-28
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Australia
9 posted 2003-07-29 04:06 AM


powerful short but very powerful
chicken
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10 posted 2003-07-29 07:26 AM


thanx for all your comments!
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