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A Feeling

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Baby_Angel123
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0 posted 07-26-2003 06:28 PM       View Profile for Baby_Angel123   Email Baby_Angel123   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Baby_Angel123

Hey sry I haven't written in a while, I'v had a lil mental block , but it's gone know lol. Tell me what ya think about this latest poem iight, Thanks ~Angel~

A Feeling

I love being with you,
and the way you make me feel.
A feeling like no other,
has ever made me feel,
but this feeling that I feel,
I'm not quite sure is real.
For I fear it's just made up,
because it's what I want.



Reach for the stars and never give up in what you believe in!

[This message has been edited by Baby_Angel123 (07-26-2003 06:30 PM).]

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dertah
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1 posted 07-27-2003 02:39 AM       View Profile for dertah   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dertah

ha ha, already doubting yourself i see.  hey, if you want it bad enough then all you have to do is hold on as tight as you can.  clearity will come eventually and youll be happier.  hatred speaks from experience, he was in your position once.
Lexy
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2 posted 07-27-2003 08:07 PM       View Profile for Lexy   Email Lexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lexy

hmm...I like it. But its bland. Try using creative twists when you can. ummm..it was a little on the short side too. That can be good if you have substance. I think this could have stood to be longer.
I liked the last two lines though.
~Lex..
kj
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3 posted 07-28-2003 06:15 AM       View Profile for kj   Email kj   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for kj

this sounds as if you're confused, just step back from the situation and stop worring everything will become clear in time
Jenn Cirrincione
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4 posted 07-28-2003 06:17 AM       View Profile for Jenn Cirrincione   Email Jenn Cirrincione   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jenn Cirrincione

Ahh the confusion of new romance. I must agree with the others- clarity will surface if given a month or two, you need to just try and have a good time okay? Good job.

JC

"Now I'm convinced that he's heaven sent, and must be out of his mind- mama he's crazy, crazy over me."

Devils Angel 666
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5 posted 11-23-2003 04:21 PM       View Profile for Devils Angel 666   Email Devils Angel 666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Devils Angel 666

Thats interesting that you still feel this way....
Well anyway...This was a decent poem overall.  Lenght like was said could be a good thing if it's deep and meaningful.  This was meaningful but not real deep.  Keep writing dear!!!
 
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