Tear-Stained Cheeks and Tired Eyes

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Teen Poetry #6

Tear-Stained Cheeks and Tired Eyes

OtherSideOfTheMirror
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since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

0 posted 2003-07-23 07:46 AM

I remember how i looked at you
With tear-stained cheeks
Through tired eyes
Wondering if you'd compromise
My brown eyes for stormy skies
I remember all I had to gain
How you gave me butterflies...
How we always loved the rain...
I know I thought things would never be the same
Since the day you whispered my name
You think its over, but it's just begun
We are where the moon meets the sun

may i note: *lalalala*

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2003-07-23 07:37 PM

"wondering if you'd compromise my brown eyes for stormy skies". "We are where the moon meets the sun." I absolutely loved these lines. This was beautiful.
~Lex...

AngelShell
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since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

2 posted 2003-07-23 08:12 PM

This was a really nice write. It flowed well and the images were amazing. I too liked the 'brown eyes/story skies' line. It brought up feelings and emotions easily.

Well done.

~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

3 posted 2003-07-24 01:13 AM

good one, where the moon meets the sun. ooowwwwwwwwwww. may i note: scibididee

Match
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since 2002-07-01

Posts 286
Canada Edmonton

4 posted 2003-07-24 01:31 AM

I enjoy this write, I like the way the words are threaded together, all in all it flows great

-ash

I'm just kickin it up

[This message has been edited by Match (07-24-2003 01:31 AM).]

Silent Evincar
Member

since 2003-07-22

Posts 179
Here There and Places Between

5 posted 2003-07-25 01:41 AM

"Compromise my Brown eyes for stormy skies..." simply beautiful. Don't get me wrong the whole thing is great but this grabbed my attention... how much does it take?? I'll never know. Maybe you have the answer.

NJS

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

6 posted 2003-07-25 07:32 PM

Wow, amazing piece from you!
This might be one of my favorites of your!
I really loved it, especially the last line.
Excellent job!

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

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