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Teen Poetry #6

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AngelShell
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since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

0 posted 2003-07-22 03:06 AM

There is a weakness in you,
A heaviness that I cannot fathom,
Nor shoulder any of.
I know that pain,
And any variation there of
Will break you,
Bring you to your knees.

I scream and beg you to re-commit
Yourself to her,
To anyone that can save you,
However you only want me.
It is a fault I cannot understand
And it is a fault I cannot fix.

I do not have the power.

You felt my fire and you felt her ice,
One cooled and gave you rest,
The other shook you,
Woke your core and made you bleed.
It is the blood you crave,
Not me,
Not her.

Once you stop,
You’ll see.
Once it stops flowing,
You’ll understand,
You’ll understand it was all for her.
I woke you up
So you could sleep with her.

~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~

Silent Evincar
Member

since 2003-07-22

Posts 179
Here There and Places Between

1 posted 2003-07-22 03:17 AM

Very interesting this write seemed to turn around on me and totally get me off balance. I like that, wow to think I am set in a certain way like that. Started strong and ended strong... bravo

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

2 posted 2003-07-22 12:00 PM

good write mate, cheereo.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

3 posted 2003-07-22 03:29 PM

Very nice. I loved the fourth stanza.
~Lex..

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