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Evie
Junior Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 15


0 posted 2003-07-21 02:26 PM


If you're looking at me,
And laughing at what you see,
You're very mistaken because
What you see is covering up,
What's deep inside of me.
If you only knew the living hell
I've been through,
And how I've made it through,
You would swallow your words whole,
One by one,
And wish it weren't true.
Because the strength I have in me,
You will never have in you.
So watch your back,
Before I attack.
Cause if you keep on doin'
What you're doing to me.
You'll wish you had swallowed
Those words you spoke to me,
And quit believing
Only what YOU SEE


© Copyright 2003 Tiffany Evangeline - All Rights Reserved
Lexy
Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
1 posted 2003-07-21 03:56 PM


I love this Evie! I love this line: "You would swallow your words whole, one by one."
This was great.
~Lex..

SharaRose
Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~
2 posted 2003-07-21 07:23 PM


WOW! You spoke the words I have been *trying* to find for so long!!! It's amazing to read the words right before my eyes that I've been trying to find to define how I feel. Thanks for sharing this. It's amazing how freeing these words were. I know what i'm saying makes no sense either, but thanks, it's nice to finally find the words to define my feelings!!!

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495
LI, New York
3 posted 2003-07-21 07:27 PM


I agree, this is a great one!  You tell'm!  Although I can't say I've been there... my whole cover up was made to make people laugh, to make them truly smile when I can.  But still, a great poem, undiminished by my difference of opinion.  Keep up the writing!

quote:
And quit believing
Only what YOU SEE


Now there's a sentiment I agree with totally.

                                                                                                        'Rich'

Forever I will stand
always here with you.
Now stay and hold my hand
and together we'll go somewhere new.
~Rich~

dertah
Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

4 posted 2003-07-21 09:32 PM


haha, stepping out of the basement.  society knows not what awaits for them.  excellent read.
Silent Evincar
Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179
Here There and Places Between
5 posted 2003-07-22 01:04 AM


You know a piece like this kinda makes me want to know everything you've been through... per say. It does spark question but not anger, yes society..
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