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A Bad Love |
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~*BayBee*~ Member
since 2003-04-09
Posts 65In The Clouds... |
I knew it was going to happen soon, I knew the day would come when you'd break my heart in two. Obviously you got tired of me and moved on, but now all there is to say to you is so long. I'm not going to cry anymore because i guess it wasn't true. So now I know you lied everytime you'd say "I Love You." You broke my heart because of some stupid fight, but now i see that you were the one who wasn't right. You were the one who cheated, you were the one who lied, But I'm not confused anymore, i guess this really does mean good-bye. *Im sure you have noticed that most of my poems were about heartbreaks,... I get inspired to write my poems when i get my heartbroken. This poem was to my Ex boyfriend, Maurice.* |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
hey, this was actually pretty good. i like it, tho rhyme and me don't usually get along. good job~ ri *the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time* |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
Heartbreak can sometimes be the best muse. It seems easier to write about something that is hard than it is something that is easy, however there can be a trap that I myself have been caught in many times. I liked this though, there was a nice flow throughout the whole thing. I think the punctuation worked really well and the rhyme helped it along without seeming forced. Nice work. ~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~ |
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~*BayBee*~ Member
since 2003-04-09
Posts 65In The Clouds... |
thank you ~*BayBee*~ |
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