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Lindsay
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since 2003-03-26
Posts 59
South Dakota

0 posted 2003-07-16 01:28 PM


Looking back into my past
Trying to figure out how to be happy
Then I find myself in my old life
The one when I wasn’t depressed
When I didn’t cut my wrists
When I wasn’t crying over you
Because you were there, holding me in your arms
Telling me everything would be all right
But now your gone
And I’m all alone
And I have to face this on my own

[This message has been edited by Lindsay (07-16-2003 01:36 PM).]

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Rise of Truth
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since 2003-07-12
Posts 59
Beneath the Fury Sun
1 posted 2003-07-16 03:20 PM


In my experience with sadness i have found it one beast with a myriad of faces.  My advice is such; your grief is unique, wield it with flair and emotion. Poetry conveys anger with equal grace. If your pain haunts you, then ensure it haunts the reader. Don't think of writting as a release of pain, but a prison...chain it and distribute it to all who would view it. In the light it will be diminished, and you will have conquered it.

I am the prophet
Harbinger of what you fear the most
Your enemy of belligerent honesty
Destroyer of your livelihood, built on falsehood

CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
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since 2003-07-16
Posts 248

2 posted 2003-07-17 03:33 PM


nicely done, i think it flowed well
hopefully you can find the one who wont make you face it alone

Remember this advice: Hate is only reserved for those we truly love, and dont eat boogers!

Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
3 posted 2003-07-17 05:07 PM


hmm..sometimes its best to experience things on your own sometimes, its how you grow as your own individual person. But I understand where you are comming from. Keep your head up.
This was a great piece.
~Lex..

[This message has been edited by Lexy (07-17-2003 05:09 PM).]

Magia_negra
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since 2003-07-16
Posts 77
CA, USA
4 posted 2003-07-17 08:27 PM


I agree with Lexy. Life experience is always good, even if it hurts like hell. You just gotta be strong enough, don't let it break you. As for me... my pain made me stronger.

...somos los locos para siempre
para siempre te amo
   mi vida...

Shlee
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since 2003-02-16
Posts 72
USA
5 posted 2003-07-17 08:56 PM


I'm so sorry you're hurting like this.  I know what it's like to go through things alone but I also know that there are people out there that want to be there for you.  Hang in there and you'll find some one.  Not to be discouraging but it took me a few years and now I have a really great person I can fall back on.  You can do it
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