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infinite disaster
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since 2003-06-01
Posts 69
Illinois

0 posted 2003-07-04 05:04 PM


Hold my gun to your head
Pull the trigger
And never say I didn’t warn you
I beg of you
The pain will quickly fade
You won’t feel a thing
Close your eyes
And never say I didn’t warn you
These words will never be spoken again
This pain will never again be released
You said I had no reason to be alive
Now I do
You screamed for help
That will be the last time you will ever scream
I didn’t stop you
I wanted you to scream
To somehow feel the pain I feel
Shut up
The tint of the tape that covers your mouth
Reflects off the wall and into my eyes
Times of us flash into mind
Stab the mind
These wounds can never be healed
But never say I didn’t warn you
The blood splatters
And onto my white shirt
The metallic taste reaches my tongue
I look into your cold eyes
How could you do this to me
With one last look
I put my gun to my head
But never say I didn’t warn you.

Okay, Ihaven't written in a very long time, writer's block sucks. anyways, this is really really dark. but i was listening to a song and these words just came to me.

I am proof that the heart is a risky fuel to burn.

© Copyright 2003 Akie - All Rights Reserved
dertah
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since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

1 posted 2003-07-05 05:56 PM


what love can do, right?  nice work i thought.
Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
2 posted 2003-07-06 04:38 PM


ahh...good. So..real I felt like a was witnessing it all. It is dark, but oh so well written.
~Lex

Kandi
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 354
North of Hell
3 posted 2003-07-07 02:07 AM


Your critique says to be honest so I'll admit I was caught off guard by this one and at first maybe even a little uncomfortable.....but then I read it again and wow....loved it. Amazing piece of work. So honest and detailed. Great work.
~Kay

Just wanna be funny,looks like the joke's on me.
So call me Captain Backfire.

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