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tapper798
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since 2003-07-20
Posts 353
My own world

0 posted 2003-07-20 04:23 PM



I am new here and i wrote this poem and thought that many teens go through this so here goes...

Heartbreak

I look through all your letters,
while the tears stream down my face,
Thinking of all the times, and
memories I cannot erase.

You sweet words fill my mind,
Your gently touch, I still fell.
You glowing eyes, I wis would
help my heart to heal.

But they are what did this,
caused my heart to break,
shatter it to pieces.
Now a new heart i have to make.

I put a bandage over my heart,
to help heal the wounds,
The pain will eventually go away,
but the scars will forever loom.

The scar is ugly, big, and visible,
You don't know what you've done.
My feelings for you were undescribable
I thought you were the one.

The tears contintue,
one after the other, realizing
that you weren't meant
to be my lover.

I realize my heart will heal after time
though i will always miss you,
I'm going back into the world,
to begin something new.

Please tell me what you think!

© Copyright 2003 Erin - All Rights Reserved
Evie
Junior Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 15

1 posted 2003-07-20 08:14 PM


Hola tapper, how's it goin'?  I am new as of today, I became a member....lol...I like the poem u submitted...though I've never experienced what u have personally, I have in a way cuz I've watched other people go through it....it sucks!  You presented ur poem in a nice flowing manner...good job!  It actually rhymes!  Keep up the good work...and if u want, check out my poem called "Feeling What's Me"...laterz...


SharaRose
Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~
2 posted 2003-07-20 11:33 PM


So heartfelt. Heartbreaking, but it's nice you are going to start anew. Good posotive outcome!!

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

dertah
Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

3 posted 2003-07-21 09:16 PM


aaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh, is there no end to the madness.  no offense to you, nice write.
Silent Evincar
Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179
Here There and Places Between
4 posted 2003-07-22 01:34 AM


Okay honestly you scare me... honestly does this always have to happen this way??!! But, aside from that I love the mood it set off, no matter how sensative it is.
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