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HeroicVillan
Junior Member
since 2002-11-09
Posts 34
Lost.....

0 posted 2003-06-28 05:52 PM


help me out here, i havent written in awhile, so i need some feedback.....


We never cared to meet,
now we'll finally see.
Was it lies and deceit,
or is this love for free?

Dont know your face.
Barely heard your voice.
I cant keep up this pace,
but whose given a choice?

You've found a way,
beneath my skin.
Maybe you'll stay,
but who will win?

Do i want u here?
I dont know you yet.
What should i fear,
how hard could this get?

© Copyright 2003 James Bicknell - All Rights Reserved
WinterWren
Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
1 posted 2003-06-28 07:02 PM


Internet love? If that's what this is about then I can relate only too well.
I think I liked the 3rd stanza best.
It is so hard never knowing if they're always truthful with you, especially since you can't look in their eyes for the answers.
Well done.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

HeroicVillan
Junior Member
since 2002-11-09
Posts 34
Lost.....
2 posted 2003-06-29 02:41 AM


yeah, it is about internet love, thankfully, she lives a short ways away, and we're meeting soon, i just wanted to write out my feelings so i know how i really feel. sometimes, thats the only way.
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