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BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

0 posted 2003-06-26 11:09 AM

On an early Sunday morning,
On a cold December day,
I visit the old coffee shop;
The one that I first met you at.
It sits at the corner of 54th and Main
If the memory is faint in your mind.
You used to read poetry here
Every Tuesday night.
And I sat at a table
Right in the middle of it all,
Admiring the way you could easily
Take a room full of strangers
To a world only you know.
And secretly, I loved you.
You were the only reason
That I came every week.
I just wanted to hear your words,
Spoken through your beautiful mouth;
Content with the constant of you.

It’s been a year now.
You’ve moved on with bigger dreams in mind.
Finally, the waitress comes to my beckon
Asking if I’d like a cup of coffee
I simply reply that
A glass of water will do just fine.
When she returns, I take a sip,
Gazing out the window
At the world covered in white,
And think to myself
Of the good times of my past
...And how I long to hear you again.

I don’t come on Tuesday nights anymore.*

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

1 posted 2003-06-26 11:21 AM

WOW!!! That's ALL I can say! This poem is soooo beautiful! Jenn...I love this style and the topic that you wrote about, and the imagery! God...everything about this poem is so perfect! LoL...Seriously...I really LOVE this poem. I think this may be one of my favorites. Not of just yours, but of all time favorites. This is a very beautiful poem! AWESOME! Love's.

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

2 posted 2003-06-26 11:28 PM

Damnnnn...! That was REALLY good!!! My reaction is the same as Megan's! The imagery was great, I could picture everything in my mind so perfectly. I absolutely love this one. I'm gonna print it out...! Yep, that's right! Haha. Great greattttt work! ~Jess

"If I could give you one gift it would be my eyes...So you could see how it feels to be me looking at you." -Unknown

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

3 posted 2003-06-29 12:19 PM

Oh, gosh. Okay. That one's probably the best I've seen of yours yet. Going in my library...

-Lioness

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

4 posted 2003-06-29 03:13 PM

Yeah..Everyone already said what I think, and I already told you personally, so I guess I just wanted to tell you again, this was great. I liked it alot. Great job.

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

Kandi
Member

since 2000-06-14

Posts 354
North of Hell

5 posted 2003-06-29 03:57 PM

Wow! *wide eyed* This was amazing! Absolutely beautiful. Full of emotion and honesty - two very good things!
I hesitate to even suggest that you change anything about this, but I have one *TINY* critique - the 4th line felt a little awkward to me. Maybe it's the arrangement of the words, but ending it with "at" somehow interupted the flow. Maybe that was just me. *shrug*
But still....AMAZING job! I'm going to look for more of your work!
~Kay~

The day you were born, you were born free
That is your privilege.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

6 posted 2003-06-30 11:57 AM

What they said lol! Really this is a perfect poem. Nothing was out of place.
Beautiful!

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

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