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Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

0 posted 2003-06-23 03:00 AM

Jenn

I'm not ready
to write about me.
I can't seem to find
the perfect literary
form of myself.

I'm not ready
to really try.

I'm not ready
to find out what's real.

I'm not ready to lose.

I'm not the pretencious fool
with a beautiful mirage.

I'm better off.

I'll win someday.

Go, Jenn, Go.

Jeremy H.

[This message has been edited by Jeremy Halstead (06-23-2003 03:06 AM).]

Albino_Jenn
Member

since 2003-03-03

Posts 105
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 2003-06-23 07:59 PM

I liked your poem, but somehow you lost me! I am not sure I quite understand it, or the title..but I guess sometimes the best poetry doesn't have to be understood!! Good write, keep up the good work!!
Jenn

**It's better to be hated for who you are, than loved for who you are not**

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

2 posted 2003-06-23 08:37 PM

uhh okie hey you know I wish you would check me out in open poetry or write me btw I tried to call the other day to wish you a happy birthday

I didn't forget about you...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Kandi
Member

since 2000-06-14

Posts 354
North of Hell

3 posted 2003-06-24 09:32 AM

Haha to your critique message...
I enjoyed this one a lot. I think we writers can all relate to the idea of hesitating to reveal too much of ourselves in our writing. I don't get the Jenn reference but I'm sure it means something to you.
Another thumbs up from me.

~Kristin

The day you were born, you were born free
That is your privilege.

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

4 posted 2003-06-25 01:05 AM

Well not my favorite from you but a good one none the less I like the refrences to not being ready to reveal yourself I know that one well. I think I would have understood a bit better if I had known the "Jenn" you talk about but either or it's still a good write!
~Live and Laugh~

Don't look to me for perfection, for I will surely let you down.
~Bella~

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