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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
I don't know anything at all. I've only lead myself to believe. an oblivion spans before me. And I'm lost in this utter darkness. I wish I knew how to make you love me. I'm just a little naive. Or possibly more. All I've known is innosence. All I've known is what I've taught myself. All I've taught myself seems to be wrong. I've strived not to be like the rest. got this paper in front of me, and I don't know what to say. For once at a loss for words. So I leave you with your regret. And I don't believe the way you do. I'm disgusted my your behavior, so leave me quick. Leave me to my nothingness. |
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*Hurley*Girly* New Member
since 2003-06-22
Posts 6 |
hey.. what to say.. it was great.. keep up the work! try to expand your ideas with details .. it will make it captivating for others to read... but overly.. great job.. |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
*sigh* I know the feeling. Unfortunately. You might try putting some consistency in your poetry... such as, a set rhythm... rhyme... format... it just makes it more like poetry instead of a letter with line breaks.  On getting your feelings across, though... wonderful job.  -Lioness |
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