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xEmperorEmber
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tx

0 posted 2003-06-21 04:35 PM


Mother? Did you ever love me?
or was it all just obligation?
Father? did you ever know me
through all the complications?
ive been a child
ive been a son
ive been a liar
I have been one
to be difficult in times of peace
to plot your deaths in your sleep
to recipricate the feelings
you gave me
of cruel abandonment and
the feelings of lonely

I cant help but feel like
Somethings gone wrong
when 5 years ago I felt so strong
standing ready with all defenses
i still couldnt help
but feel so defensless
i know who raped me of
my sanity
who shaped the way
of the life ahead of me
it was your neglect
that tortured my head
who wired my jaw open
ready to shovel the ****
i was fed

but im glad it worked
out this way
because i dont need
anything from you
i would hate to let you
have credit for who
i am and what ill become
ill make you eat my ****
which is the **** of the ****
you fed me for so long
and i cant wait for
crippled bodies to become
defensless
lifeless and mechanical
on life support systems
wrinkled and pruned
and looking so helpless
for then i will rape you
for i know where the plug is

[This message has been edited by xEmperorEmber (06-21-2003 04:42 PM).]

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vicky
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since 2003-06-21
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1 posted 2003-06-21 07:12 PM


wow,....although this is not the style i like to write, it is defentely the type i like to read, seems pretty deep, then again...

vicky

xEmperorEmber
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tx
2 posted 2003-06-21 08:14 PM


thank you i think, some people rebel against their parents, a few despise them for every thread of life that keeps them bonded to this earth... i dont know.. its irrelevent.


come back Jaime.

Jaime
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3 posted 2003-06-27 05:53 PM


I am.

Here. Which is so far from there.

I actually liked this quite a bit.. I like the grit.. something hard to chew.. I like the way you word things.. and your poems normally flow well without necessarily holding a structure.. which I can appreciate it.. There were a few lines that I like particularly.. I'm not sure why.. but they were talking to me.

(and look, you have a name, how funny)

Love,

yours.

(i have one too)

the faeries creep into my hair at night leaving it in terrible knots

xEmperorEmber
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4 posted 2003-06-27 07:50 PM


Sorry about that... Thanks jamsters! i appreciated it. I like the raw emotion of the poem too... i felt like i got a few things out.. but eh.. i dont know.

[This message has been edited by xEmperorEmber (06-27-2003 08:03 PM).]

xEmperorEmber
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tx
5 posted 2003-06-29 08:51 PM


random reply.. now what!! *thumps his chest*
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