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Jenn Cirrincione
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0 posted 2003-06-16 10:30 PM


I'm just here
and you see through me
one day so pretty
so bleak the next-
all I do is focus on you
and on how I should act
and what I should say
your idea of caring
is saying that word
the slick moving L
seeping in through skin
the thinner the better
I always say
and you think it's
enough
to keep me waiting-
maybe I don't want to
anymore.
Maybe I'm
tired
of
the
game.

Sorry so scattered- venting.

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1 posted 2003-06-17 02:41 AM


Wow...I like this. I really like the style you wrote it in...and how you went back and forth from like "I say this...you say that" type of thing. Nice work.

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2 posted 2003-06-20 10:50 PM


and you think it's
enough
to keep me waiting-
maybe I don't want to
anymore.
Maybe I'm
tired
of
the
game.


Grr... lemme at him. you wrote what I feel.

It is said the Creator has taken a handful of South Wind and given each newborn Arabian the power of flight without wings

Marshalzu
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3 posted 2003-06-25 05:04 PM


quote:
your idea of caring
is saying that word
the slick moving L


Heh I just loved these lines, they are so wonderful and original, great writing

Andrew

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