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Hallucination
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0 posted 2003-06-16 06:19 PM


"Evelyn"

She's a waitress at ol' man O'Neal's bar
Where me and the boys we do come a lot
And she always smile taking our orders
In her dirty apron with her small block
But the boys always give her a hard time
She's used to it so she don't ever mind

Every time that we start up the jukebox
I see her in the background dance along
So when the boys play their dart or pool games
I walk over and request a new song
Handing out beers from the bartender saol
She says:"Thank you for the dance beautiful"

Oh, you don't find a lot of women
With a heart as big as Evelyn's
Who put's up with crap day after day
Who never take the cowardly way
Sweet, sweet Evelyn..

"I'm an actress working as a waitress
Just trying to earn up some extra cash" she says
"Will you walk me home after work
When I am done taking out all the trash"
Smile at her I would be delighted to
I will just sit right here and wait for you

About the actress thing just go for it
Look around and tell me what's there to lose
Do you wanna be old and mis'rable
It's time that you put on your courage shoes
Here's for realists and none believers
Not a place for spirits or for dreamers

Oh, you don't find a lot of women
With a heart as big as Evelyn's
Who put's up with crap day after day
Who never take the cowardly way
Sweet, sweet Evelyn..

(Spoken)
Two weeks later
I have an urge to see her
Again...

Ol' man O'Neal comes and brings me a letter
Says:"She left you a little something it seems
Before heading out toward the walk of fame
About time she started reaching for her dreams"

(Spoken)
About three months
and tons of letters later,
she writes...

Fortune and fame's begun nipping at my heels
But I'll never forget just where I came from
And here's a ticket to starry Hollywood
Because I want you to see what I've become

Oh, you don't find a lot of women
With a heart as big as Evelyn's
Who put's up with crap day after day
Who never take the cowardly way
Sweet, sweet Evelyn..
Sweet, sweet Evelyn..

© Copyright 2003 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved
*Dark Princess*
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since 2003-04-13
Posts 22
lost in the shadows
1 posted 2003-06-18 02:29 AM


I thought this was a very beautiful story spelled out in song and cant believe everyones missed it!  There might be a spelling mistake but besides that I'm sorry I have no critiques....Its good...Princess
frolicking dolphin
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since 2003-02-23
Posts 268
my own special world
2 posted 2003-06-18 06:13 PM


I really liked this poem too, it was interesting and well written.

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

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