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~*BayBee*~
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since 2003-04-09
Posts 65
In The Clouds...

0 posted 2003-06-12 11:20 PM



I tried to make it work but i've cried my last tear.
I cant take the pain and hurt, I've cried for too many years.
I have to let go, my heart cant take any more.
I have no more tears to cry, thats the last.
So now all im saying is good-bye.

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RedStoneEB
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since 2003-06-08
Posts 772
uk
1 posted 2003-06-13 03:21 AM


it seems to me that you like to get rid of the hurt inside get it out of the way so you can start your life anew like restarting your life to happiness and waving goodbye to that saddness.

enjoyed reading your poem

my mind is like a dream sometimes confusing

tonia
Junior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 41
taiwan
2 posted 2003-06-13 09:31 AM


if you could put more emphasize on your diction...it'd be great...not saying that it isnt...its a fab! good job~
tonia =)

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