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Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2003-06-12 11:33 AM


So many things,
I've been forced to keep,
locked up inside.
Things that completely,
refuse to let me sleep,
things I had to hide.
So many tears,
wash down like rain,
and cause a cloud in my head.
Tears that were
caused by so much pain,
from what was said.
So many secrets,
I dare not tell,
for I could be wrong.
Secrets that come with fear,
I'm already goin' through hell,
you needn't come along.

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

© Copyright 2003 Staci Weidner - All Rights Reserved
idleeyes86
Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 64
Somewhere over the rainbow
1 posted 2003-06-12 11:59 AM


I must admit that I haven't really liked most of your poems on here (but don't take this the wrong way because its all a matter of opinion and judging by the positive feedback you seem to get most would disagree with me) however something about this one really appealed to me. It was sad and melancholy, but it wasn't depressive, I like the clouds in the head idea and on the whole this really flowed nicely, good stuff.

[This message has been edited by idleeyes86 (06-12-2003 12:00 PM).]

SilentTears
Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371
Lost and Broken
2 posted 2003-06-12 03:18 PM


I really like this one...I felt it the whole way through. Nice job.

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

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