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Teen Poetry #6

wound called life

a deer in lifes headlites
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since 2003-06-04

Posts 23

0 posted 2003-06-06 08:04 PM

this is a song i wrote sometime last year and I thought it would be good to put on here.

I feel the pain of death as I come to grips with my life. Never knowing were i'm going or how I got where I am today. Now there is no escape from this prison I created for my sins.
Now I'm washed up, i'm broken, i'm tattered and torn. And now i'm bleeding from this wound, this wound called life.
Looking back on my life I see an empty void, it can't be filled now that i've come this far. You've left me behind in a world of pain. I'm near the edge, i'm looking down, and soon I know i'll be underground.
Now i'm battered and bruised, i've been used and abused. Now i'm bleeding from this wound, this wound called life.
I'm tired of this life I live. I'm walking to the edge. No longer will I lured back with your emtpy promises and i'm falling down.
Now I'm washed up, i'm broken, i'm tattered and torn. And now i'm bleeding from this wound, this wound called life.
Now i'm battered and bruised, i've been used and abused. Now i'm bleeding from this wound, this wound called life.

I don't really like the last verse that much, but im in a funk and haven't been able to get it how I like it tell me what you think.

infinite disaster
Member

since 2003-06-01

Posts 69
Illinois

1 posted 2003-06-06 09:29 PM

hey hun! good write! steve, do u need a hug or someone to talk to, b/c i'm always here for u!

) i like all of the poem, keep doing a good job!
much love, akie

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
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2 posted 2003-06-06 10:07 PM

First things first,
Welcome to pip!!!!
I can really relate to this song/poem as Im sure alot of people can.
Excellent job!

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

LegalSecret69
Member

since 2003-06-04

Posts 69
Virginia

3 posted 2003-06-07 09:59 AM

I really enjoyed reading this....excellent job. Keep writing and posting...you have a great talent! "Secret"

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