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Master
Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2003-07-10 04:22 PM



You said
melancholy pieces suit me well.
Well,
today I dressed up in my Sunday best,
sobbed my belly out
until my stomach swelled…
In places of buttons,
tears
shone on my vest.
Careful not to spill a drop,
I rushed after you
with a mouthful of poetry to recite...
You
were walking down a half-lit avenue,
dressed seductively
in
black and white.
I caught up to you on the corner,
caught my breath
and calmly proposed,
“Listen,
honey,
I need a shoulder
for the burden of verses that I’ve composed.
Just ask me,
and I’ll dedicate everything to you,
overflowing with grief,
and with tears
to spare.
Help me!
You don’t want me to drown
-- do you? --
in the bottomless void of gloom
and despair?”
You responded with laughter.
You thought I was kidding, --
just some talented actor
playing a role.
You didn’t see all the misery hidden,
like some wonderful treasure,
at the depths of my soul...

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Jennis#1
Member
since 2003-07-08
Posts 112
IL, Usa
1 posted 2003-07-10 04:30 PM


Great poem. It is a very well written poem.
I think that it should he in a chicken soup book. keep on writting.

WinterWren
Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
2 posted 2003-07-10 11:06 PM


Excellent, excellent poem! Good imagery through the whole thing.
The ending wraped it up just right.
Loved this one.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

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