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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain 
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a little song to write out onto a page or three maybe this is a life not ment for one person in particular a fatal challenge nonetheless met in time as the fool goes on believing my rhythm cast aside shadows in the work of an art genius that can't underscore an egotistical person such as yourself which in that case would all wrap up into one thing me......... thank you doctor, that will be all, please pay at the front desk *the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time* |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Geez but the last line threw me... First I thought it was an exam as in the type you have to sit at school, then I thought it was a twisted version of someone being examined by the doctor, but maybe it was even more inverted and the doctor was being examined by someone else. I'm stupid  I can't seem to really understand it probably....dunno but if you would maybe explain it, I would be really interested to read what you say about it. Anyhow, now as I've finally made myself reply to it, having read it on three separate occasions without knowing what to say, I'll sit back and wait and see what happens.....*scurries away before her stupidity is fully noticed*.  Luv, Liz xxx "Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~ |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
Well, this is more about an exam of the person inside, and the last line is like a thank you to the doctor, and kind of a retort to the pay at the front window, like i am almost pshycotic ( excuse the spelling ) riley *the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time* |
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spritrider87 Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294NH |
wicked good poem. i dont know if i totally understood it but i got the idea. keep writing i am in trouble but no one knows it if you can figure out my messages thenhelp me. |
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lingering thoughts Member
since 2003-05-03
Posts 70Illinois, USA |
it was short and to the point but i didnt understand it completly ... I thought it was about a school exam at first but then, like you said, i thought it was someone being examined physcologically...hmmmm i liked it though it was a different apporach! *Cassandra |
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Fariegirl Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 147 |
good |
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~*BayBee*~ Member
since 2003-04-09
Posts 65In The Clouds... |
Girl, u know i am soo slow so i didnt get it completely but it was a good poem... Keep up the good work and i'll be reading more... ~*BayBee*~ |
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