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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
So confused Don't know what to do Lost in this freaked-out dream Twisted world of fate What do you have in store for me now Do you hold all the cards? Or can I have my own hand in this wicked game? Weaknesses starting to show The things I hide, were meant to stay that way Inside, I'm just a crumbling city of tears and broken dreams Can I please have my mind back Or aren't you finished torturing it? No strength left to finish the game So I guess this is checkmate...you win... If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain. |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
Wow Staci...you never cease to amaze me. I love all of your poems and this just adds to the list. Nice work! Really great! As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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babygurl55 Junior Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 18 |
hey, this was a great poem. i really liked it. you had so many deep feelings. i haven't been here very long but this was one of the best that i have read so far...! |
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EleanorMoonbaby Member
since 2002-09-02
Posts 202England, UK |
This struck me as quite philosophical, but at the same time it deals with human emotion very well. I liked the use of the game as a metaphor for an inner turmoil. Nice one  Ellie  I'm not dead, OK? I'm just a little electroencephalographically challenged! |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
"Inside, I'm just a crumbling city of tears and broken dreams..." Love it...! Great job..I really do like this one! ~Jess  "What I am is good enough if I would only be it openly." |
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