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Hallucination
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since 2001-03-18
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0 posted 2003-05-27 04:17 PM


"Where Are You Now"
(27/05/03)

Sittin' starin' at the phone demandin' it to ring,
But why's nothin' happenin'?
I don't know, no, I don't know.
Lonely, empty, so confused, I don't know what to do,
Why haven't I heard from you?
I don't know, no, I don't know.
Waitin'...
I am bittin' off my nails,
Thinkin'...
That maybe my love have failed.
Where are you?
Tell me,
Where are you now?

Without you here by my side a breath's not breathin,
Life's just one lonely season.
Without light, all without light.
Photographs and memories sails around in my head,
Look at all the tears I've shed.
Without light, all without light.
Hopin'...
That you will come back someday,
Prayin'...
That my heart can lead the way.
Where are you?
Tell me,
Where are you now?

You're makin' me nervous.
All I do's reminisce.
And it's makin' me so blue,
Don't know what to do.

So I'm...
Waitin'...
Thinkin'...
Hopin'...
Prayin'...
Waitin'...
I am bittin' off my nails,
Thinkin'...
That maybe my love have failed.
Hopin'...
That you will come back someday,
Prayin'...
That my heart can lead the way.
Where are you?
Tell me,
Where are you now?
Where are you now?...

© Copyright 2003 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved
ESP
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
1 posted 2003-05-27 05:49 PM


Awesome!!!!!!! Wow, this is really good, I love it! It flows beautifully, the structure is really different and works so well....have you set it to music yet? Makes me think "song"....thanks for sharing this, Im threading it to my library for sure
Luv, Liz xxx

"Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~

ESP
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
2 posted 2003-05-29 06:57 PM


How come no one seems to have seen this?
IT'S GOOD!!! lol
K best scoot before I get seen replying twice....
liz xx

"Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~

BrokenAngel
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since 2002-01-06
Posts 141
Puryear, TN, USA
3 posted 2003-05-29 07:25 PM


WOW!!!  Excelent work on this one!!!  Everything flows together so well and it just...I can't think of a way to describe it and give it justice.  I'm with ESP on wondering why any one hasn't seen this one yet.  It's wonderful!!  Keep it up!!

Read my work and read my thoughts
I'll go back into the night now
---Night Angel

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