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Albino_Jenn
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since 2003-03-03
Posts 105
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2003-05-22 09:36 PM


The years that past were those of joy
And an innocence so pure
We lived with youthful magnificence
We cherished who we were

An open mind and unbroken heart
Naive to bitter emotions
Living our life day to day
Engulfed in dream like notions

Barricaded by a wall of time
The future not in mind
Reach out to grasp reality
Simple pleasures left behind

Your heart begins to crumble
True happiness whispers in the past
Love blossoms in your mind
Frailty hinders it to last

The time of wisdom is upon you
The one thing left is memories
You drift once more to happiness
Your realities slowly freeze

**It's better to be hated for who you are, than loved for who you are not**

[This message has been edited by Albino_Jenn (05-22-2003 10:51 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 Jenn - All Rights Reserved
blueyedlioness
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since 2003-04-24
Posts 289
USA
1 posted 2003-05-22 09:57 PM


Oooh, I like it. The rhythm was a teensy bit off in a couple of places, but you had the rhyme going perfectly. Nice!

teenpoet
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since 2001-10-17
Posts 280
Michigan
2 posted 2003-05-23 10:25 AM


Yeah it was a little off, oddly enough I noticed it.  But it was good.  What does the title mean?

I don't know if today is a good day, or if yesterday was, or if tomorrow will be, but I'd like to think so.

ESP
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
3 posted 2003-05-23 11:32 AM


I like the content a lot, nicely expressed as well. Thanks 4 sharing
Luv, Liz xxx

"Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~

BrokenDreams
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since 2003-02-09
Posts 425
In The Clouds
4 posted 2003-05-23 11:47 AM


This is really good, but I'm just wondering, what does the title mean??
~*~Jenni~*~

Every oak tree started out as a couple of nuts who stood their
ground. --Anonymous

Albino_Jenn
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since 2003-03-03
Posts 105
Ontario, Canada
5 posted 2003-05-24 01:31 AM


Well, the title was suppose to be "travelling through the years" but I think the translater screwed up, I am pretty sure it says,"displacement through years" heh, either way, now you know what it was suppose to be!! Thanks for the comments they are always much appreciated!!
Jenn

**It's better to be hated for who you are, than loved for who you are not**

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