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Teen Poetry #6

From the ashes rises the Phoenix

teenpoet
Member

since 2001-10-17

Posts 280
Michigan

0 posted 2003-05-22 10:30 AM

The phoenix
Is alone
Unique
Builds herself anew
From her ashes
Never dying
And never really living
Encased in fire
Mystical
Ethereal
Unreal even to the believer
Alone in her uniqueness
Angry
Despondent
Depressed
Uncared for
Encased and seluded
In a lonely world of her own
But magnificent
Powerful
Cruel
And kind....

Beautiful....

I am undeserving of the title

AlostHeart
Member

since 2003-05-01

Posts 78
Wisconsin, U.S.

1 posted 2003-05-22 11:59 AM

Cool..... ~Tori Louise~

:bounceing:

[This message has been edited by AlostHeart (05-22-2003 12:00 PM).]

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

2 posted 2003-05-22 12:03 PM

This is good. I like it a lot. It's simple, with sort lines, but you get teh point acroos beautifully. Good write.
Jenni

Every oak tree started out as a couple of nuts who stood their
ground. --Anonymous

ESP
Member Elite

since 2000-01-25

Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....

3 posted 2003-05-22 12:59 PM

Ace! I wish I could say bleh bleh you should have done that or bleh bleh bleh that would have been better but this poem is best exactly as it is and I enjoyed it muchly!
Liz

"Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~

[This message has been edited by ESP (05-22-2003 12:59 PM).]

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2003-05-22 01:24 PM

Personally, this poem meant a lot to me, because the Pheonix, while a mystical character, is my favorite animal. It is what I want to be when I return to the Earth.

The Pheonix is, indeed, a beautiful image, and it is a wonderful compliment to be titled as one. You depicted the rising very well. I am impressed! And am looking forward to reading more.

Well done!

--Marie

"You can be idealistic for all of ten seconds before you die." (Imitation of Life)

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

5 posted 2003-05-22 04:34 PM

Brilliant! I love Phoenixes and you depicted their beauty very well. Amazing job.
*Allison*

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