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xxshadowxx
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since 2003-05-17
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Texas

0 posted 2003-05-20 07:26 PM


No one seems to care
this pain I can not bare
cold stares
hatefull glares
I can see you think I'm a freak
my piercings hair and clothes does it make you feel weak
my music is to loud
I dont fit in with the crowd
I chose not to be you
some one hatefull,judgemental, with out a clue
I have my own thougts and dreams
to you they may be stupid it seems
I will not let you make me feel like I dont belong
you are the ones that are wrong!


© Copyright 2003 Carrie - All Rights Reserved
Albino_Jenn
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since 2003-03-03
Posts 105
Ontario, Canada
1 posted 2003-05-20 07:28 PM


Bonne poésie, il a beaucoup de passion behing le, et il montre vraiment le sentiment! Le bon travail!
Jenn

**It's better to be hated for who you are, than loved for who you are not**

xxshadowxx
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since 2003-05-17
Posts 43
Texas
2 posted 2003-05-20 07:38 PM


Now if i could only understand that... hmmm..
               ~*Carrie*~

"Hard days made me, hard nights shaped me"

BrokenDreams
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since 2003-02-09
Posts 425
In The Clouds
3 posted 2003-05-20 08:00 PM


shadow,
I like this. A lot of people see me as "different" too. I think they're the different ones! LoL. Good write. I enjoyed the sentiment. I'm not sure if that was stated correctly, but oh well. I'll be different.(haha)
Jenni

There are three kinds of people in this world, those who can count, and those who can't.

Albino_Jenn
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since 2003-03-03
Posts 105
Ontario, Canada
4 posted 2003-05-20 08:59 PM


Here let me help you desifer it:
Good poem, it has much passion behind it, and it really shows the feeling! Good work!
Jenn

**It's better to be hated for who you are, than loved for who you are not**

xxshadowxx
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since 2003-05-17
Posts 43
Texas
5 posted 2003-05-20 09:02 PM


Ahhh... i knew that... lol. well thank you im glad you liked it
         carrie

"Hard days made me, hard nights shaped me"

ESP
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
6 posted 2003-05-22 07:05 PM


Everyone is different, so be you and be proud of it, as this poem suggests you already do Great poem, although maybe you should work on some structure or meter or something. However I don't know too much about this stuff, so don't take my word for it!! Thanks for sharing
Luv, Liz xxx

"Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~

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Beneath the northern stars
7 posted 2003-05-22 07:32 PM


You go girl! I'll give you the same advice my friend Tyler gave me: Don't let it change who you are as a person. Keep it up!

~Elizabeth

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

blackandwhitehorizon
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since 2003-05-05
Posts 183
an akward state of mind
8 posted 2003-05-22 09:47 PM


nice poem

"Being grown up isn't half as fun as growing up; these are the best days of our lives"

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