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HiddnThots
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0 posted 2003-05-20 05:18 PM



I tried

I tried to hold you back
to keep you mine
to show you off
to keep you under my spell

i tried to keep you
like a stollen jewel
like a 1st place trophy
like a million and one dollars

I tried to force you
and i pulled at the rope
and i yanked at the collar
and i grabed at the leash

but you got away....

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skyshine
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Beneath the northern stars
1 posted 2003-05-20 06:14 PM


That's too bad....you never know, maybe they'll come back...Welcome to Passions!! Please check your email for a special message.

~Elizabeth

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

xxshadowxx
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since 2003-05-17
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2 posted 2003-05-20 06:28 PM


Nice poem I liked it.
        ~Carrie~

"Hard days made me, hard nights shaped me"

blackandwhitehorizon
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an akward state of mind
3 posted 2003-05-21 04:26 PM


i like this

"Being grown up isn't half as fun as growing up; these are the best days of our lives"

Fading Away
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4 posted 2003-05-21 06:01 PM


Welcome!

Sadly, you can't keep them under your clutches if they want to be free.  This is a good write... I look forward to more!

--Marie

"You can be idealistic for all of ten seconds before you die." (Imitation of Life)

ESP
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Floating gently on a cloud....
5 posted 2003-05-22 07:21 AM


Excellent.....this is an all too familiar feeling to me, and you express it well! Welcome to Passions!
Love, Liz xxx

"Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~

BrokenDreams
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In The Clouds
6 posted 2003-05-22 06:21 PM


First of all, welcome to Passions, hope you enjoy it here.

Second, good poem. I like it a lot.

Jenni

Every oak tree started out as a couple of nuts who stood their
ground. --Anonymous

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