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FlyingCloud
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A little place inside my head

0 posted 2003-05-16 05:58 PM


Hanging by a thread,
Watching my friend go by,
In his casket white.

I swallow my tears.

Talk to him? Can't.
I miss the debates we would have.

Laugh with him? Can't.
I miss the corny jokes.

Cry with him? Why?
I am already crying.

Deep inside,
The pain hurts so much.

Just thinking about him makes me...

Want to scream: Why!?

Why did you have to go?
I didn't even say goodbye.
Too suddenly, your life ended.

I move on, and there are days,
Where I am numb....

There are days where I,
Want to scream...

There are days when I,
Wish I could've been there,
With you in your last moments,
So at least I can say "good bye".


Don't be dismayed at good-byes. A farewell is necessary before you can meet again. And meeting again, after moments or lifetimes, is certain for those who are friends.
Richard Bach


[This message has been edited by FlyingCloud (05-16-2003 06:06 PM).]

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snoduck
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1 posted 2003-05-16 07:02 PM


I'm sorry. You sound hurt, I don't know what it's like to lose such a close friend, but you did a wonderful job at expressing your feelings. It brought a tear to my eyes. Great Poem!

-Erica-

wvplayernotreally
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2 posted 2003-05-16 10:46 PM


This was a great write. I appreciate it so much. Final goodbyes are hard with so many questions. I like the style this was in. It was good to the point

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

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3 posted 2003-05-17 02:05 AM


...sigh...I'm so sorry that you have to go through the pain and heartache of a friend lost. I know to well the feeling, having lost a friend of my own to quickly and without the chance to say goodbye. The poem brought tears to my eyes and any poem that can provoke that much emotion is a materpiece indeed.
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blackandwhitehorizon
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an akward state of mind
4 posted 2003-05-17 11:15 PM


Very good poem that I enjoyed reading

"Being grown up isn't half as fun as growing up; these are the best days of our lives"

FlyingCloud
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A little place inside my head
5 posted 2003-05-17 11:24 PM


Thank you for replying to this poem!

Always remember to forget
The friends that proved untrue.
But never forget to remember
Those who have stuck by you.
-Anon

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Beneath the northern stars
6 posted 2003-05-18 03:28 PM


FlyingCloud, I'm so sorry to hear about your friend. I'm sure that they know you still care about them, and your friend will live on in your memories. I wish there was more I could say, but nicely expressed emotions.

~Elizabeth

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

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7 posted 2003-05-20 01:23 PM


Oh, wow... I don't believe I can imagine the depth of the pain of losing a friend. You expressed yourself beautifully, although I almost wish I wouldn't have felt this poem the way I did.

Beautiful write.

--Marie

"You can be idealistic for all of ten seconds before you die." (Imitation of Life)

CwboyAtHeart
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8 posted 2003-05-20 02:10 PM


I believe that everything happens for a reason, but I also know that sometimes that reason it quite hard to find.  This is tough, but a great poem.  Thanks for sharing this.

      - Cody -

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