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Dustin462
Junior Member

since 2002-08-09

Posts 23
Selah, WA

0 posted 2003-05-15 08:01 PM

This is a comparison from something a kid would love and something an adult would read.

               FICTION

Heroes gather from across the world
Some with powers, some with skills
Some with hearts, some with wills
X-ray vision, Super Strength
Super-Man
Batarang, Martial Arts
Batman
Web, Wall Crawling Abilities
Spider-Man
They are all strong
They are all powerful
But when combined they can't be touched
They would defeat evil through out this world
They would bring peace

             NON-FICTION
People gather from across the world
Some adults, some children
Some with love, some with hate
Kindness, Able To Share
A Child
Rebel, Ready For Anything
A Teenager
Mature, Experienced
An Adult
They are all able to love
They are all able to care
But if they trusted each other
imaging what could happen
They would be able to topple anything
They could possibly bring peace to our world

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

1 posted 2003-05-16 12:38 PM

Oooh... I love the way you wrote that. It's so totally different from everything else.

Right at the last, though... isn't "imaging" supposed to be "imagine" or "imagining"?

That is totally great.

wvplayernotreally
Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

2 posted 2003-05-16 04:55 PM

I liked they "they would bring peace" then the "They could possibly bring peace to our world"

goodwrite

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

FlyingCloud
Member

since 2003-04-28

Posts 151
A little place inside my head

3 posted 2003-05-16 05:13 PM

I like the way this was done, however there needs to be a little more elaboration.

^~^If we cannot live so as to be happy, let us least live so as to deserve it.~*~
Immanuel Hermann Fichte

blackandwhitehorizon
Member

since 2003-05-05

Posts 183
an akward state of mind

4 posted 2003-05-17 11:03 PM

Yeah, I like this a lot. I'm constantly thinking of how a world could be peaceful, and for everyone to work together, and eveyone to agree, and everyone to be respectful and resourceful... then I look at reality and remember how impossible that is...

"Being grown up isn't half as fun as growing up; these are the best days of our lives"

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