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ya me voy (now i leave)
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ya me voy (now i leave) |
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punkrockerrobin 
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV 
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ya me voy y estoy muy trieste no se cuando voy a regresar el cielo esta nublado las calles estan solitarias tengo que ir a despedirme, de la persona guemas quiero voy subiendo los escalones y una briza de frio recore todo mi averpo entre a la casa y ella estava alli sentada en su cama como siempre nose pero no quiero seguir mi corazon latia tan rapido que no pude comtemer u corri a abrazarla sus brazos tan hermosos ue siempre you admirba sus cahalleos blancos y largos se enredaron entre mis dedos "adios mi muchachita bonita" elle mi dijo "adios abulita cudiese mucho" en ese momento las gotas de lluvia golpejailan el techo me fui friste rogandole a Dios que me permitiera voiver a verla pero al parecer no me escucho el no me escuho NOW I LEAVE now i leave and i am very sad i don't know when i am going to return the sky is cluded the streets are lonely and abondoned i have to say goodbye to the person i love most i am climbing the steps and a cold breeze travels over my body i entered the house and she was there seated upon her bed as always i don't know but i don't want to go on my heart was beating so rapidly that i couldn't contain myself and i ran to embrace her her arms are beautiful that i admire her long white hair that runs between my fingers "goodbye my pretty little girl" she said "goodbye grandma take care of yourself" in that moment drops of rain ponded the roof i left sadly, pleading with GOD that he would permit me to see her again but it appears he doesn't listen to me he doesn't listen to me hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men! |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
ok i wrote this one at a poetry work shop that i went to a while back ago my friend put it into spanish for me. this was a while back ago tho. enjoy! robin hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men! |
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FlyingCloud Member
since 2003-04-28
Posts 151A little place inside my head |
I can honestly say this brought tears to my eyes  .Well done write. ^~^If we cannot live so as to be happy, let us least live so as to deserve it.~*~ Immanuel Hermann Fichte [This message has been edited by FlyingCloud (05-15-2003 05:03 PM).] |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
thank ya. it was the topic the teacher at the workshop gave us think of someone special to you and write about them. bah it was sophmore year in hs man i am getting old! robin hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Robin~ This is such a touching write. I truly 'felt' every word. Nicely done.  Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Robin, this was very powerful. You and your grandma sound like you had a wonderful relationship.  ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Well being the spanish guru that I am, I will coment on the fact that there are some gramitical errors in the spanish part, but that is just a side note. This was heartwrenchingly beautiful, a great testimony to poetry and the feelings of the heart. ~Live and Laugh~ Always strive for excellence never perfection. |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Well, being the Spanish failure that I am, I won't comment on any of the gramerical errors I missed! lol. THis was sad and beautiful at the same time. I loved it! always here with you. Now stay and hold my hand and together we'll go somewhere new. ~Rich~ |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
Alright you do have some Spanish grammatical problems and you spelled some words wrong- for instance it's supposed to be triste not trieste and also it's supposed to be no se(I don't know how to type accents on the computer) instead of nose. But then again what does that matter. It's a good poem. I don't know if today is a good day, or if yesterday was, or if tomorrow will be, but I'd like to think so. |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
lol well i didn't put it in spanish a friend of mine did i wrote the english i just thought i would post both parts lol. glad yall liked it. hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men! |
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