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Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

0 posted 2003-05-10 04:51 PM




The Unloved

The vibrant glowing around us all
projects our worth.
Demanding to be seen by all
who feel our enchantment.
Delivering crimson, truest in form,
through care and compassion and truth
to any hearts with shades of blue
who know just who we are.
Who we are is simply what we do.
We befriend, we share, we sacrifice.
We are those less shared upon...
less sacrificed for.
But as the endless lives we touch
become more endless,
we've found bliss in ourselves
and eachother.
With that revalation discovered,
our love will go no longer...
unloved.

Jeremy D. Halstead 6/16/00


Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love.

© Copyright 2003 Jeremy D. Halstead - All Rights Reserved
WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
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...Coming to
1 posted 2003-05-10 05:12 PM


oooh, I really like this one, it built up the ending really well. Which is perfect.
Excellent poem!

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

OtherSideOfTheMirror
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since 2002-12-19
Posts 245

2 posted 2003-05-11 12:55 PM


Well you've got me reading your stuff regularly now. It's so good it really is and I just keep coming back for more!!!

I love the ending. NIIICE

FlyingCloud
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since 2003-04-28
Posts 151
A little place inside my head
3 posted 2003-05-11 12:59 PM


I thought that this poem was very deep.
Loved it!

+Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.+
T. S. Eliot (1888 - 1965)

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4 posted 2003-05-12 01:36 AM


Grr...just joking! I loved it as usuall! you have a true gift for this and it flows through the words on the page turning it in to an absolutly wonderus creation( I know my spelling sucks!) I am in agreement with someone else up there too, you have me reading regularly so keep on with it, your very good.
~Live and Laugh~

Always strive for excellence never perfection.
~Bella~

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