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Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2003-05-05 11:16 PM

The tears well up behind my eyes,
they threaten to sing the saddest lullaby.
It somehow lures me to sleep,
the intricate composition of my tears is mind baffling.
And I fall into utter exhaustion,
A blank and lonely place.
impossibly insane are the thoughts hiding beneathe my unconscious mind.
The unknown desire, the unwanted memory.
Almost more excuciating than reality.
In the face of this all,
I move on, and learn to breath under the thick layers of water, attempting to sufficate me.

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

1 posted 2003-05-05 11:47 PM

hmmmmmmm very intresting. explain to me what this is about.
robin

hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men!
cody saw some pigs so he tried to fly but he fell and went BOOM!

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

2 posted 2003-05-06 07:28 PM

hmmm, I'm thinking this is about someone crying themself to sleep, and collasping under ultimate emotional and physical exhastuation, and then being haunted by nightmares, but the last line suggests a bit of hope.
thanks for reading..
I really appreciate it.
Hi, my name is Alexis and I'm addicted to poetry as well. lol
Lexy

[This message has been edited by Lexy (05-06-2003 07:30 PM).]

blackandwhitehorizon
Member

since 2003-05-05

Posts 183
an akward state of mind

3 posted 2003-05-06 08:02 PM

I really really like that poem... I don't know what to say about it... But I would like you to know I enjoy it... keep writing

blackandwhitehorizon
Member

since 2003-05-05

Posts 183
an akward state of mind

4 posted 2003-05-06 08:02 PM

(by the way, I too am addicted to poetry)
haha...

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

5 posted 2003-05-07 02:04 AM

This just might be one of my favorites of yours!
*sigh* I just love it, and I understood it's meaning. Thank you for sharing.
And I think we can conclude that anyone at piptalk is addicted to poetry lol!

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

6 posted 2003-05-10 12:11 PM

This is one of the best poems I've read in a long time!! I can really relate to this. At times, whenever you just feel like everything is weighing you down, and you're "suffocating" it's nice to write and have that release. Very nice job!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

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