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Paragon
Member

since 2003-02-16

Posts 114

0 posted 2003-05-05 06:52 PM

Is it visible in my eyes?
Can you hear it in my voice?
Can you see it in my walk?

I am falling...

deeper
  deeper
    deeper

with every smile
you pull me under
and gracefully I

s
  i
    n
      k

your melodic voice
calls me onward
into the unknown

I gaze into your eyes
as they slowly ((encompass)) me
in their chocolate depths

I am  sl o w l y  falling
peacefully drifting
to you and all that you are.

FlyingCloud
Member

since 2003-04-28

Posts 151
A little place inside my head

1 posted 2003-05-05 07:03 PM

Bravo!

+Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.+
T. S. Eliot (1888 - 1965)

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

2 posted 2003-05-05 08:59 PM

This is a very interesting poem. The style was very unique. I like it, though. Nice job. It's refreshing to read something that doesn't make you want to cry. LoL. Nice job, anyway.

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

3 posted 2003-05-05 11:53 PM

Very, very good indeed.
Jenni

To hate you must first have loved.

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

4 posted 2003-05-06 01:54 PM

*applause*

Wonderful.

blackandwhitehorizon
Member

since 2003-05-05

Posts 183
an akward state of mind

5 posted 2003-05-07 03:30 PM

good

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

6 posted 2003-05-07 05:34 PM

Very different poem, I like it alot!
The imagery is excellent.
Well done!!

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

7 posted 2003-05-07 05:35 PM

sorry, had to come back and add it to my library.

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

8 posted 2003-05-07 05:36 PM

sorry, had to come back and add it to my library.

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

9 posted 2008-09-24 02:56 PM

Truly Beautiful.

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