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davidmerriman
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since 2003-04-30
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Dallas, TX

0 posted 2003-04-30 08:59 PM


definately not my best work, but i would like to share it with you.

High School

I walk down the halls, trying not to focus
At the bathroom stalls, writings on the wall.
Hookups, breakups, homework assigned.
Assignments aligned for maximum suffering.
More work, less talk, real world buffering.
Make-ups and breakups, relationships
Shakes up the lonely, if only, they could see
A world that isn't sex, drugs, and popularity.
A world of clarity, without bullshit work.
Without jerks, without superficial girls
Giggling about nothing, rushing their life,
To be sixteen, eighteen, then soon a wife,
Unhappily married to the ex-quarterback,
Football star bad-ass, now hooked on smack.
Treats his wife like crap, beats his kids.
Oh how it hits, suburbia, blue collar families
In angst and tragedy, it's sad to see,
How many failures live in the shadows
Of the success laid out by the few winners.
Night clubs simmer with money and cash
While the poor stand out like a rash.
Uneducated and never reevaluated,
Worthless as trash, it'll never stop.
The hierarchy, the race to the top
It all starts here, in this building.
Kids choose their path in life, of success,
Amongst drinks and sex, jack-off magazines.
It seems life as a teen is full of stress.
And life ain't what it seems, let it be known.
If you follow your heart, work hard and it's shown.
You'll live a good life, that's all you need.
Forget the bullshit, the cool **** , the weed.
Forget the fast times and quick lines.
The stress of expectations loses patience.
But remember, through the stress,
Just try your best, work for success.
Keep your chin up, High School will be over.
And soon you'll have bigger problems to shoulder.

© Copyright 2003 David Merriman - All Rights Reserved
jaysh
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since 2003-04-16
Posts 133
IL, USA
1 posted 2003-04-30 09:12 PM


wow that was great...very true too! Good kob keep writing
lauren03
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since 2002-01-04
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oh, usa
2 posted 2003-04-30 09:54 PM


wow...... that seriously gave me goosebumps!!!!!!!!! i graduate highschool in a month and it all sounds too real. good job.
Eminem wanna be
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since 2003-02-04
Posts 52
Windsor, Missouri
3 posted 2003-04-30 11:38 PM


heh yeah we understand that one

You can do anything you set your mind to man--EMIN3M
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newguy04
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since 2003-04-23
Posts 17
ohio
4 posted 2003-04-30 11:45 PM


good is the first thing that comes to mind
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5 posted 2003-05-01 03:02 AM


wow highschool that was 3 years ago for me bah i never wanna go back but college starts in august bleh!
robin

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blueyedlioness
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since 2003-04-24
Posts 289
USA
6 posted 2003-05-01 12:29 PM


It had a very different pattern... and I like it. I think everybody over the age of twelve can identify with that one. Thank God I graduate next year.
AlostHeart
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since 2003-05-01
Posts 78
Wisconsin, U.S.
7 posted 2003-05-02 04:51 PM


i like it! It relates to everyone.

BabieDoll
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since 2003-02-13
Posts 268
BFE
8 posted 2003-05-02 05:46 PM


You think this isn't one of your best pieces?!? Hun, you need your head checked! *lmao* This was absolutely amazing. It reminds me of something I would hear on that HBO show 'Def Poetry'...at least that's what came to mind as I read. Definately an awesome poem! Great work sweetie!

~J.Lynn

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

FlyingCloud
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since 2003-04-28
Posts 151
A little place inside my head
9 posted 2003-05-02 06:17 PM


Perhaps this doesn't relate to me as much, seeing as I do go to a private school...But I see some of the problems in this poem at school...
One of my classmates had commited suicide a few weeks ago, under unknown circumstances.

^~Whoever does not love his work cannot hope that it will please others.~^
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