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OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

0 posted 2003-04-27 04:57 PM

A Broken Person

It feels worse than a scraped knee
This is more than the childhood wound
I've lived with all my life.

As the scar fades my pain reopens
And this never goes away
It hurts with the passion that caused it.

Open and raw, I can find no bandage.
Broken and bleeding,
But disappeared to all but me

I try to cover it but it won't heal
And I am reminded forever
That I am a broken person.

Wow... I didn't know a person could be as upset as I am right now. I've been sleeping for about 24 hours so I don't really know how that looks but go with it anyway.

[This message has been edited by OtherSideOfTheMirror (04-27-2003 04:58 PM).]

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

1 posted 2003-04-27 06:11 PM

"As the scar fades my pain reopens..."

Ooooo, I really like that right there! Showed plenty of emotion. Great write! ~Jess

"What I am is good enough if I would only be it openly."

mindy
Junior Member

since 2002-12-18

Posts 34
VA, US

2 posted 2003-04-27 07:27 PM

I really enjoyed this poem...I believe that it really gives you a "visual emotion." It's like I can almost see the scar...and also feel what it is that won't go away...it truly left me feeling...broken...Great job!

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

3 posted 2003-04-27 07:50 PM

sorry your so upset.....maybe you need some sleep!jk. You poem looks great...nice job.

Jeremy

Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love.

CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

4 posted 2003-04-27 11:23 PM

Wow. This definitely had a lot of emotion in it. I could feel your pain, and being broken isn't a very good way to feel. I hope that things turn around for you and everything gets worked out. Thanks for posting

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

aaron woodside
Member

since 2001-09-26

Posts 256

5 posted 2003-04-28 02:09 AM

Hey stalker.

I'm sorry you feel so badly right now. Things will get better, I promise.

I really liked this. The fact that you expressed the pain you are feeling so well, really sticks out. I'm glad you entered this, that way I can vote for it.

ex animo,
Aaron Woodside

IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI

Mon Cherie

Senior Member

since 2001-10-31

Posts 922
Land of Never-ending Summers

6 posted 2003-05-04 10:20 AM

I know you might have heard this many times over, but I'll still say it...

Sometimes, time is the only factor that can heal your wounds. As time passes and one matures, you'll realise that whatever that had once hurt you so badly may not be as bad as it once seemed. It MAY even be a blessing in disguise.

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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