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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
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California

0 posted 2003-04-26 08:51 PM


I pick a stranger out of the crowd,
and follow him along with my eyes,
I familirize his features in to my mind,
it is a game I play to combat this lonliness.
I create an image in this space of emptiness,
A love that will ride in on a silver horse,
but the color of my love is as unreal as frost in July.
So I gradually wittle down my lonliness,
And continue on with my games..
hoping someday my stranger will turn to me and see my desperation,
Someday someone will come along to see me, and save me from this invisable asylum.

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Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
1 posted 2003-04-26 09:39 PM


great analogy between your loneliness and the dreams you hope will someday come true.
really liked it.

Jeremy

Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love.

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
2 posted 2003-04-26 10:16 PM


w o w. I can't tell you how much I love this piece!!
It's just...wow..Im speechless.
Perfect, and going in my library.

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

sing'n fool
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since 2003-04-17
Posts 82
Morris, Il
3 posted 2003-04-27 11:44 PM


This is a really good piece.  Your use of words here was right on the money.  The only sad part is there will be no one riding in on a silver horse.  It's ashame that love doesn't happen like that!!  It would just make the game that much easier!!. Great job.

Sing'n fool

Be yourself.  Say what you feel.  Nothing is wrong. To your own self be real!!

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