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mindy
Junior Member

since 2002-12-18

Posts 34
VA, US

0 posted 2003-04-26 05:10 PM

You're So Much

Time moves slow but oh so fast.
In your arms, I'm hoping this moment will last.
I'm all caught up in those eyes and your smile.
I haven't had this good of a feeling in quite a while.
I look for the words to describe how I feel...
But anything I say doesn't seem as real.
There's no way to perfectly describe there emotions.
Feels like I'm walking on the clouds, seems like I'm floating.
It's all I ever think about,it's the only thing on my mind.
I'm wrapped up, no doubt, I think about you all the time.
I tell you there's no way to describe it, it's way too great.
Being tired there's no way to hide it, I stay up late.
I think about all the little things you do and how happy you make me...
And when I sleep, I dream of you, hoping no one will wake me.
You're so sweet and gentle, I'm lost in your touch.
Your fingertips like fire, I can miss it so much.
I love to be held in your arms,
Safe from hurt and safe from harm.
Love to feel you hands go gently around my hips.
My smile, anticipation, longing for that kiss.
So just know that I'm liking this feeling of being happy all the time.
And you're so much of that something, I thought I'd never find.

[This message has been edited by mindy (04-26-2003 05:10 PM).]

aaron woodside
Member

since 2001-09-26

Posts 256

1 posted 2003-04-26 05:41 PM

"Your fingertips like fire, I can miss it so much."

Wow!! Absolutely loved this line. This was very good and showed your true feelings towards this person. It also had a nice meter that gave it a very even flow.

And I love that line.

Welcome to PIP.

Hope to see more from you soon.

ex animo,
Aaron Woodside

IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

2 posted 2003-04-26 09:44 PM

I so eagerly anticipate a time when such happy sentiment can come from my heart again.
very nice writing.

Jeremy

Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

3 posted 2003-04-27 12:18 PM

Very sweet poem!
I really like this one, especially the last line.
The only thing I didn't think fit in this poem was the part, "I tell you there's no way to describe it, it's way too great."
I would take the 'way' out, it's kind of a distraction.
That's just a suggestion though because I like the rest of the poem alot, and it is yours.

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

sing'n fool
Member

since 2003-04-17

Posts 82
Morris, Il

4 posted 2003-04-27 04:58 PM

Great job here. It's soooo great that you can have such genuine feelings for someone. It's always a warming thought that someone can make you feel this way. Keep up the good work.

Sing'n Fool

Be yourself. Say what you feel. Nothing is wrong. To your own self be real!!

OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

5 posted 2003-04-27 05:06 PM

That is so good!!! I really am jealous of you actually, you make that sound soooo good.

Nice work, I'll be following your stuff from now on!!!

-cassi

Stinky Twinkie
Member

since 2002-11-26

Posts 204
Dinwiddie

6 posted 2003-04-27 07:55 PM

that was nothing short of killa...thats all Stinky Twinkie can say

-Stinky Twinkie-

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