Meaningless Dreams(Pleas tell me what ya think)

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Teen Poetry #6

Meaningless Dreams(Pleas tell me what ya think)

Albino_Jenn
Member

since 2003-03-03

Posts 105
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2003-04-24 11:40 PM

Your dreams are moving forward
While your life is standing still
All the things you hoped for
Leave a whole you cannot fill
The one thing you were proud of
That you thought you’d always do
Now seems so far from happiness
Forget all that you knew
In the blink of an eye
Your dreams can be shattered
Your hopes for the future
Were all that mattered
With everything you wanted
Gone down the drain
You have nothing to wish for
You’re left with all the pain
Whoever said life was easy
Never truly felt sorrow
How can they pass judgement
On a world based upon tomorrow
One false move
And your life is constant misery
All you ever lived for
Will turn to hurt and fury
Your dreams, they will not wait
The are slipping slowly away
You have lost what life is about
Your hearts emotions are at play
One day, and your life is over
It’s time to pick up the pieces
Start all over again
As your meaning slowly ceases

**It's better to be hated for who you are, than loved for who you are not**

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

1 posted 2003-04-25 01:49 AM

Very strong poem,
I really enjoyed this one.
I tried to pick a favorite line but I love them all!!
Excellent job!

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

sing'n fool
Member

since 2003-04-17

Posts 82
Morris, Il

2 posted 2003-04-25 03:07 AM

a bit negative, but I suppose that's the part of life that inspires some good poetry...as is the piece I just read...good job.

Mike..Jeremy H.

Be yourself. Say what you feel. Nothing is wrong. To your own self be real!!

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

3 posted 2003-04-25 11:41 AM

I REALLY like that. Nice rhythm. Nice use of rhyme... yep.

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

4 posted 2003-04-27 08:03 PM

it's a good thing that there is an alternate point of view to this poem or life would be a pretty crappy idea...it takes a good poem to make us think about that...nice job.

Jeremy

Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love.

WindSong
Member

since 2002-12-23

Posts 313
Long Island, New York

5 posted 2003-04-27 08:18 PM

Excellente! This was good. I enjoyed it greatly. Thanks for sharing with us other writers n such. Peace! Keep it up. ~*~Kirah~*~

I lie all the time - infact Im lieing right now!
Today is yesterdays tomorrow.

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