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peachesNcream
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since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

0 posted 2003-04-22 08:27 PM


I wrote this for my mom awhile ago. Tell me what you think!


Sometimes I know the words to say,
Give thanks for all you've done,
But then they fly up and away,
Quickly as they come.

How could I possibly thank you enough,
The one who makes me whole,
The one to whom I owe my life,
The forming of my soul.

The one who tucked me in at night,
The one who stopped my crying,
The one who was the expert,
At picking up when I was lying.

The one who saw me off to school,
And spent sad days alone,
Yet magically produced a smile,
As soon as I came home.

The one who makes such sacrifices,
To always put me first,
Who let me test my broken wings,
In spite of how it hurts.

Who paints the world a rainbow,
When it's filled with broken dreams,
Who explains it all so clearly,
When nothing's what it seems.

Are there really any words for this?
I find this question tough,
Anything I was to say,
Just doesn't seem enough.

What way is there to thank you,
For your heart, your sweat, your tears,
For ten thousand little things you've done,
For oh so many years.

For changing with me as I change,
Accepting all my flaws,
Not loving because you had to,
But loving "just because,"

For never giving up on me,
When your wits had reached their end,
For always being proud of me,
For being my best friend.

As I com to realize,
The only way to say,
The only thank you that's enough,
Is clear in just one way/

Look at me before you,
See what I've become,
Do you see yourself in me?
The job that you have done?

All your hopes and all your dreams,
The strength that no one sees,
A transfer over many years,
Your best was passed to me.

Thank you for the gifts you give,
For everything you do,
But thank you, Mommy, most of all,
For making dreams come true.

Love,
Your Daughter

"The reason I talk to myself is that I'm the only one whose answers I accept."

© Copyright 2003 Jessica Dodson - All Rights Reserved
LuckyFelix
Junior Member
since 2003-01-17
Posts 34
Here.
1 posted 2003-04-22 08:30 PM


...I need to give my mother a call...Very very nice job, Jess. I love it.
foreverwithyou
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since 2002-10-20
Posts 204
Wonderland
2 posted 2003-04-22 10:10 PM


I have been constantly fighting with my mom about stupid stuff mostly but then I say stuff I dont mean and end up feeling guilty maybe i should show this to her,if u dont mind,this really was a good poem u have my vote.

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

peachesNcream
Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears
3 posted 2003-04-23 06:40 AM


Thanks! No, I wouldn't mind if you showed it to her. Just thought I'd let ya know! ~Jess

"The reason I talk to myself is that I'm the only one whose answers I accept."

Scandalous
New Member
since 2003-04-10
Posts 9

4 posted 2003-04-23 05:44 PM


wow Jess, I loved this... not much to say, it was GREAT! hehe good job
sykopathicfreek
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since 2003-04-22
Posts 24
ohio, usa
5 posted 2003-04-24 08:40 AM


i wish i could write poems about my mom like this. I cant seem to think of anything good about her at most times though. I think its a really good way to express your relationship with her. good job
CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14
Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA
6 posted 2003-04-24 12:40 PM


Wow...  I REALLY liked this one.  I can totally relate...  I hope/wish everybody had a mom like this when they were growing up, but unfortunately it's not this way for everybody.  This was great, it flowed very well.  Thanks for posting, you have my vote.

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?  

aaron woodside
Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256

7 posted 2003-04-24 10:58 PM


Good write Jess.  Got my vote.

ex animo,
Aaron

IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI

*Belabebeautiful*
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since 2003-01-03
Posts 696
washington, USA
8 posted 2003-04-24 11:52 PM


Oh wow..that's all I can say..not true I'm a very talkitive person! But really this was so sweet and tender and heart felt and your mamma must just be bursting with pride to have someone like you in her life! It reminds me with me own relationship with my dad actually cause that's who I grew up with but it truley is touching...wonderfull
~Live and Laugh~


Always strive for excellence never perfection.
~Bella~

[This message has been edited by *Belabebeautiful* (04-24-2003 11:52 PM).]

peaceful_dreamer
Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 159
SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW
9 posted 2003-04-25 12:54 PM


Wow. this is great. I read this in one of the chiken soup for the teenage soul books, and i've been wanting to know - did it make your mom cry? It's a wonderful poem. I had my mom read and she cried. Great work!!!
aaron woodside
Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256

10 posted 2003-04-25 12:59 PM


You read this exact poem in one of the Chicken soup books?  

Has this been published before Jess?

ex animo,
Aaron

IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI

WinterWren
Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
11 posted 2003-04-25 01:46 AM


This is SO beautiful!!
It's the sweetest poem!
you have my vote on this one!
I hope this gets into the book!!

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

sing'n fool
Member
since 2003-04-17
Posts 82
Morris, Il
12 posted 2003-04-25 02:39 AM


damn it girl, your mom better see this poem...this is a truly touchin piece of work.
My mom would jus tfall to pieces if I ever gave something this great...now maybe I'll try...btw this is actually Jeremy Halstead here, but Mike and I read this together and this is our "combined" opinion...great job.

Jeremy...and Mike(sing'n fool)

Be yourself.  Say what you feel.  Nothing is wrong. To your own self be real!!

blueyedlioness
Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289
USA
13 posted 2003-04-25 11:50 AM


What an awesome Mom you must have...

That's really special.

[This message has been edited by blueyedlioness (04-25-2003 11:50 AM).]

Mon Cherie
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since 2001-10-31
Posts 922
Land of Never-ending Summers
14 posted 2003-05-04 11:09 AM


Oh, Jessica! This is so sweet! It nearly brought tears to my eyes, thinking about my mother. I really hope this gets into the book, but I'll keep it in my library anyway.

Heh, I noticed you wrote "Stairway to heaven" in your profile... Did you read about it somewhere?

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

FlyingCloud
Member
since 2003-04-28
Posts 151
A little place inside my head
15 posted 2003-05-05 05:59 PM


I know this: We can never tell our parents enough that we appreciate them for what they have done for us.

+Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.+
T. S. Eliot (1888 - 1965)

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