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sing'n fool
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since 2003-04-17
Posts 82
Morris, Il

0 posted 2003-04-22 02:52 AM



Dreaming thoughts of new days
where the reality of today fades away;
when all is not lost that I know
and the world makes sence once more.

Sometimes I long ot find
a state of mind that has no burden;
a state of mind where i can finally relax.

I no longer want to be burdened
with the harsh realities of life,
not that I want to die,
just to move past my own limitations.

Life is at a standstill...
not progressing!
When will I ever be free?!
Free from myself,
and everything I submit myself to
Will I ever find my salvation?!

I have to try!
I have to rise above myself
Because I only limit my own exsistence!

If i just look deep inside,
I can find a better me.
The person I long to be...
is my true self,
my inner me!!

[This message has been edited by sing'n fool (04-22-2003 11:40 AM).]

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BrokenAngel
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since 2002-01-06
Posts 141
Puryear, TN, USA
1 posted 2003-04-22 02:47 PM


This one hit a nerve big time.  I can really relate to your feeling in this work.  Wonderful write, I'm really looking forward to reading some more of your writtings.

"Sometimes I long ot find
a state of mind that has no burden;
a state of mind where i can finally relax."

One typo but a powerful statement.

Read my work and read my thoughts
I'll go back into the night now
---Night Angel

peachesNcream
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since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears
2 posted 2003-04-22 03:49 PM


I am in total and complete awe after reading your poem. It's amazing how a poem can do that to a person.

"If i just look deep inside,
I can find a better me.
The person I long to be...
is my true self,
my inner me!!"

My fave part is right there! While I was reading this I couldn't believe how well I can relate to what you're saying. This is an awesome poem! Great job! ~Jess

"The reason I talk to myself is that I'm the only one whose answers I accept."

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