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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
I guess I got tired of posting all those sappy break up poems, I have several more but I thought a nice change of pace would be in order. This one is not my favorite and needs some work I think but give me your suggestions ok? Wonder Essence soul the lilting voice of an elven like madien across a white sand beach Space Interspace Time Glowing orbs snuggled within the folds of a black velvet sky Structure Chaos Reality The red white and blue of a tattered flag billowing out gently at half mast Honesty Integrity Pride A father gazing lovingly into the depths of his baby sons new born azure eyes Curiosity Fear Emotion A panther padding silently across murky green moss Eyes rivited on the object of his entrapment Epiphany Idea Thought A younge girl starring out the window at midnight Pondering the workings of the world through word Always strive for excellence never perfection. |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
there's not a negative thing that could be said about this poem except that there wasn't more of it to read...absolutely loved it...the idea, the the way you presented it and brought it to a wonderous close...should've made it a book submision. Jeremy Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love. [This message has been edited by Jeremy Halstead (04-22-2003 04:01 AM).] |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
wow! I didn't realize that it was that good, thank you for you reply and your generious complement. As for the book submission..I may still sibmit it..we'll see.. ~Live and Laugh~ Always strive for excellence never perfection. |
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