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Teen Poetry #6

Burning Heart

Peacebri
Junior Member

since 2003-04-16

Posts 44

0 posted 2003-04-21 06:40 PM

My heart pounds and burns
Twists and turns
No where to hide
It chooses one side
Then changes it's mind
It must be blind
Not to see
That he belongs with me
I tell myself I can move on
I think of him fromt he break of dawn
And all through the night
Me and my heart, we get into a fight
But me and my soul
We WILL reach our goal.

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

1 posted 2003-04-21 06:45 PM

I like this rhyming scheme. Good choice of words. Nice write!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

sing'n fool
Member

since 2003-04-17

Posts 82
Morris, Il

2 posted 2003-04-22 03:41 AM

it's a good write, but I do think that you sacrificed imagination to keep a rhyme. I still enjoyed it, and I'm still a fan. I will continue to read your works. Good job.

Sing'n fool

Be yourself. Say what you feel. Nothing is wrong. To your own self be real!!

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