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Giving Into Night
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Giving Into Night |
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BabieDoll Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 268BFE 
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Quivering lips Moistened eyes Staggered breaths Sobbing cries Holding back true words Choking down past feeling Heart screams with tormented pain Body left with proof of slain Body burning Soul aflame Slowly recoil Feeling shame Darkness takes its toll The world a dark sphere Life deteriorates to a nothing Only wanting to be something Night awaits Dreams conquer Reality gone Days somber * "In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..." |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
Hehe! First to reply!!! I really like this poem. I remember reading it in your binder...and I remember thinking to myself, "This is really good." I love your writing, Jenn, and I really love this one!!! As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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Peacebri Junior Member
since 2003-04-16
Posts 44 |
I love it, I think its great. *HUGS* Keep writing, you have a gift! Icon84  |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
"Life deteriorates to a nothing Only wanting to be something..." Those were surely my favorite lines! Great write and very descriptive. Jenn, oh yes yes it's a keeper! hehe ~Jess  "The reason I talk to myself is that I'm the only one whose answers I accept." |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
yes....i DIFENTLY liked this one...this was good jenn. great job.  If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain. |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
I really like it a lot. Jenn To hate you must first have loved. |
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sing'n fool Member
since 2003-04-17
Posts 82Morris, Il |
beautiful write. good emotion and feeling. I look forward to more of your work. Sing'n Fool Be yourself. Say what you feel. Nothing is wrong. To your own self be real!! |
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