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Eminem wanna be
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since 2003-02-04
Posts 52
Windsor, Missouri

0 posted 2003-04-21 09:24 AM


It's been a month now
since you last left for war.
It seems like ages
since I last shut your door.

There are so many memories
that I remember of me and you.
Like the things we said
and went through.

You've left me now
all by myself; alone.
I have no one to talk to
so my body feels thrown.

The memories are still here
luckily never forgotten yet
I'll remember them all
back to the night we first met....

I was mad cause you were 20
and you didnt think I was 12
I was alone in liking you
no one else but myself

Then we met up again later
about a week or two
You talked to me
and i talked to you

We talked about brandon
my first real love
then what was going on with him
and then there nothing else i could think of

We started hangin out then
we went down to the creek once with matt
and even did tricks on our bikes together
and that was pretty phat

then one day
my parents got into a fight
and it was to u i ran
to make everything right

we sat in your house
watching funny car races on tv
"You want to go to the creek?"
"Are you talkin to me?"

We went down there
only to swim
but we got in Ronnie's car
things went a lil too far
"GEEES I ALMOST SCREWED HIM!"

Then he's like "Why not?"
and i was like "Cause it's not right"
"Ok this won't happen again"
and hopefully there's no "MIGHT"

We drove off in his car
taking backroads instead of main
I ask myself
"What were you thinking, are you INSANE!".......

A few months later
he won't talk to me
theres a big withdraw
What do I do? Oh geee

"NO MATTER WHAT HAPPENS
I'LL STILL BE YOUR FRIEND"
He lied to me
cause it ain't true what he said........

It's been a month now
since you last left for war.
It seems like ages
since I last shut your door.
i dont know what the first and last stanzas have to do with it but it all came to me so i just wrote it
sorry it's about another GUY.....that's just my main problems right now....heh....thanz for reading it guys

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Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
1 posted 2003-04-21 12:45 PM


the indepthness of the story and the flow were great but I was a little confused. Who's the other guy...there was that other fella you called "you" and there was also Ronnie...maybe I'm just to tired to get it right now.

Jeremy

Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love.

Eminem wanna be
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since 2003-02-04
Posts 52
Windsor, Missouri
2 posted 2003-04-21 08:40 PM


I dunno either....my writings always confusing sometimes....i'm just lost i guess
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