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frolicking dolphin
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since 2003-02-23
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my own special world

0 posted 2003-04-18 08:24 AM


Why must we always follow a path
All the way through life?
Just because it's there and straight
Doesn't mean it's right.

Sure it might be easy
To follow this clear path
Worn by many footsteps
With no obstacles in sight.

This may be easy
But it will never be that fun
Where is the excitement
In Living life with nothing to shun?

Why must we always follow this path
To our predetermined fate?
Isn't it more fun to travel through the woods?
It's a decision you must make.

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

© Copyright 2003 Karen Clark - All Rights Reserved
StephyBob07
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since 2003-04-18
Posts 37
Texas
1 posted 2003-04-18 01:41 PM


very nice. soooo true! i luv it!
sing'n fool
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since 2003-04-17
Posts 82
Morris, Il
2 posted 2003-04-18 04:24 PM


That's a cool poem.  My path is not a straight one.  I feel I have to many mountains on my road, and sometimes it dead ends

sing'n fool

M.P.D.

Jaime
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Posts 250

3 posted 2003-04-18 06:37 PM


I liked these two stanzas especially:

"Why must we always follow a path
All the way through life?
Just because it's there and straight
Doesn't mean it's right.

Sure it might be easy
To follow this clear path
Worn by many footsteps
With no obstacles in sight."

Thank you for writing this poem. I couldn't have read it at a better time. And I think that's what makes a poem beautiful - that someone is meant to find it and it seems that really it has found something in you. Nice job.

Jaime

the faeries creep into my hair at night leaving it in terrible knots

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
4 posted 2003-04-18 08:35 PM


VERY beautiful poem!!
I really love this piece,
Especially the line, "Just because it's there and straight, doesn't mean it's right."
Excellent poem!

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

SilentTears
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since 2003-02-15
Posts 371
Lost and Broken
5 posted 2003-04-18 09:26 PM


"Just because it's there and straight, doesn't mean it's right." I really enjoyed this piece! Very well written. The metaphor you used was perfect! Excellent write!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

peachesNcream
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since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears
6 posted 2003-04-18 09:37 PM


I agree with Silent Tears, good write!

"The reason I talk to myself is that I'm the only one whose answers I accept."

frolicking dolphin
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since 2003-02-23
Posts 268
my own special world
7 posted 2003-04-19 02:33 PM


Thank you, as always your replies mean a lot to me.

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

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