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Albino_Jenn
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since 2003-03-03

Posts 105
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2003-04-14 12:06 PM

Through the eyes of a teen Love is but lust
It’s a game of catch and release
Their heart is hurt but never broken
Their feelings never cease
Their hearts are surrounded
They know not how to deal
How can they love another
Their emotions carry no seal
They forfeit life as a teen
To give themselves away
Never stopping to live the moment
Or live life day to day
Trapped behind society
And the judgement of their peers
They suffer through the pressures
And smile through all the tears
Love can not be sought out
When you find it you will know
Teens are simply puppets
In a frightening horror show
Love to them is all built on looks
And the kindness of their mate
They leave nothing to the imagination
Or the tender hands of fate

**It's better to be hated for who you are, than loved for who you are not**

SixtiesChick03
Junior Member

since 2003-03-27

Posts 49
NV

1 posted 2003-04-14 07:29 PM

Good job...liked it alot. Keep up the good work

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

2 posted 2003-04-14 08:26 PM

Well...I don't agree with what you said in the context of the poem but that is just a personal opinion. All told the poem was well written and showed good emotion throughout! Nicely done
~Live and Laugh~

Always strive for excellence never perfection.
~Bella~

frolicking dolphin
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since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

3 posted 2003-04-15 05:56 PM

I really liked that poem, I agree with a lot of it, but I also think "love" is a good part of being a teen because if you have someone that you think you love and trust it makes it easier to live through the day, but it can also be very painful and pointless as you expressed in the poem.

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

OtherSideOfTheMirror
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since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

4 posted 2003-04-18 11:08 AM

"They leave nothing to the imagination
Or the tender hands of fate"

That's really really good. The only thing I can think would kind of change the mold of the poem would be not to use the word "teen" so much... just because it's kind of a slang-ish term and upsets the flow a little. However, this poem doesn't claim to be the explanation of fate and love but only a description of what exactly and how little teen love means. Whatever you want to do with it...

othersideofthemirror

[This message has been edited by OtherSideOfTheMirror (04-18-2003 11:09 AM).]

SilentTears
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since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

5 posted 2003-04-19 11:35 AM

"And smile through all the tears."

Really enjoyed this! And being but 16 myself, I can really relate to this. I think you did a good job with the entire poem. Especially the rhyming scheme! Nice work!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

BrokenDreams
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since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

6 posted 2003-04-19 01:31 PM

I personally don't agree with teh context of the poem, but it was well written.
Jenni

You are what you make yourself to be.

Albino_Jenn
Member

since 2003-03-03

Posts 105
Ontario, Canada

7 posted 2003-04-19 02:45 PM

Thanks guys for the comments...I am sorry if I offended anyone with what the poem is saying about teenage love, but from my experience I found this to be true!!
Jenn

**It's better to be hated for who you are, than loved for who you are not**

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