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BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

0 posted 2003-04-13 01:55 AM

** I'm not really sure that this is very good...so if you read it and see something you like/dislike, I would greatly appreciate any constructive criticism. Thanks everyone!

**

I don't know how to explain it,
This feeling that I'm feeling
Right at this very moment.
I just don't know how to handle it...

The feelings come stongest
When the sun drifts and night falls,
Yet still visit me frequently
During the long daylight hours...

The feeling has no label to it.
It's uncontrolable...and I'm not sure
If I really want this feeling to disappear
Because it just feels...so great...

The way you tell me the things you most admire;
My beauty, intelligence, charm.
You always have a way to make me smile
When I just want to bawl for hours.

The thing is...though...
That you have no idea how strong these feelings are
I'm not really sure if even I do....
And with everything that is going on right now,
I don't think I will ever let you know...

That
It's 1:27 in the morning...
And I'm thinking of you... *

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

wvplayernotreally
Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

1 posted 2003-04-14 08:55 PM

Nice post. I liked this one

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

LuckyFelix
Junior Member

since 2003-01-17

Posts 34
Here.

2 posted 2003-04-15 05:22 PM

I love this poem. Esp. the last few lines...Whoever its about is luckier than they know, haha. Nice job.

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

3 posted 2003-04-16 03:03 PM

wow...I've almost written a poem just like this a buncha times but it would never come out right. Thnx for showing how it's done...
awesome work...aaannnnd, I hope this guy figures out what he's missin' if he already hasn't.

J.H.

Curse not upon love, for it is the greatest of great things. Be it not love that curses you....but thy lack thereof. -J.D.H.

~*BayBee*~
Member

since 2003-04-09

Posts 65
In The Clouds...

4 posted 2003-04-18 12:18 PM

great poem! it made me think of **** im goin thru right now! Keep up tha good work... i want to read more...

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