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PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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0 posted 04-10-2003 11:10 PM       View Profile for PoeticGoddessOfDepression   Email PoeticGoddessOfDepression   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for PoeticGoddessOfDepression


Trickling down my spine
-like disease-
And branching off
from the vertebrae...
into every other part in my body until
every last cell is infected.

After this my insides collapse
-on top of eachother-
Forming a barricade
of some kind...
which creates internal flood amd traps
all this disease inside of me.

The only place I can mend is home.
Home Is Not In My Room And On My Bed.
Home Is Not A Door Mat.
Home Is Not A Place Where Family Is.
Home Is In His Eyes
And In His Arms.
And I May Never Get Back
© Copyright 2003 Sara Nicole - All Rights Reserved
aaron woodside
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1 posted 04-11-2003 03:25 AM       View Profile for aaron woodside   Email aaron woodside   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aaron woodside

I enjoy anything that relates to sadness and bittersweet happiness.  I'm funny like that.  Ohh well.  I liked this.  

The beginning was a little too morbid for my usual tastes but the more I thought about it, I realized that feelings of sorrow and doubt really are like a diesease.  It spreads slowly and unstoppable.

The end on the other hand, was perfect.  Home.  I know the feeling.  I hope you find it again.  

Knowing what you know about this person and how you would feel, and how they would walk away, would you rather not know him?

You have my vote, because I enjoy dealing with raw emotions.

ex animo,
Aaron



IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI

[This message has been edited by aaron woodside (04-11-2003 03:36 AM).]

dinky
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2 posted 04-11-2003 11:00 PM       View Profile for dinky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dinky

ha!
you posted another one!! yaaaaaaaaaay!!
i luved this
it's deeeep maaan...
this was awesome
it better make it to the book 2!!

"sometimes i just feel like
quittin i still might
why do i put up this fight?
why do i still write?"

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3 posted 04-12-2003 08:32 AM       View Profile for EleanorMoonbaby   Email EleanorMoonbaby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit EleanorMoonbaby's Home Page   View IP for EleanorMoonbaby

Nice one. I liked the way you compared the feeling of emotional homelessness to disease. The ending was unexpected, which made a nice change. You got my vote!
Ellie

I'm not dead, OK? I'm just a little electroencephalographically challenged!

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4 posted 04-12-2003 09:43 AM       View Profile for foreverwithyou   Email foreverwithyou   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for foreverwithyou

i usually like when u repeat lines so i really liked this one good job man

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

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(big hugggsssssss) Oh Sarah, being away from home is indeed a nauseating feeling, I have had this disease time and time again and only love can be chicken broth! (sigh) This is a very wonderfully descriptive piece, sweet friend, we all loe you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sarah, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

carol
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6 posted 04-13-2003 10:37 PM       View Profile for carol   Email carol   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit carol's Home Page   View IP for carol

Very good you sure got my vote

Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become
Lots of Love
Rita

SilentTears
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7 posted 04-18-2003 09:13 PM       View Profile for SilentTears   Email SilentTears   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SilentTears

This was WONDERFUL! You had excellent imagery! This was most definetly a pleasure to read! You have my vote! Excellent write, absolutely love!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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8 posted 04-21-2003 02:30 PM       View Profile for PoeticGoddessOfDepression   Email PoeticGoddessOfDepression   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoeticGoddessOfDepression

Thank you everyone! I'm glad you all liked it!

~Sara

[This message has been edited by PoeticGoddessOfDepression (04-21-2003 02:31 PM).]

devinechild22
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9 posted 01-01-2004 03:43 PM       View Profile for devinechild22   Email devinechild22   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devinechild22

Sara-
   I just came back here and I searched for all of your poems and I looked at this one and almost beat myself for not replying. I'm such a dildo. We haven't talked in forever. This was an awesome write. I'm off to read some more!
        *Allison*

"Come away with me, Wendy. Come away to Neverland."

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